Schreinfeld's Reviews

[The Psychic Club]

Rude language, but really funny. I like original humour.

[Yasuo Tales: Prologue]

Really good submission. What stood out was the great music, not any flaws or errors. Some things to improve: make sure the drawings look ok. If you look at 0:06, where he is kneeling, you can see a black line extending from his wing, not part of his body. Also work on the number of drawn cells, I'd say make the fighting longer and more involved, this is what really shines, is the fluid motion of the characters. Overall this 'toon worked well for me as entertainment. I might reccommend this to my friends if was hooked into the characters development.

Shho responds:

Thanks! I actually worked pretty long on the music. Somehow I never noticed the line on 0:06 haha. Thanks, Really great crit!

[NWAR: Loose Canon]

Very well polished, I thought the script was brilliant and original. This quality of material could be aired in front of an international audience, like in a film festival.

If you made something of equal quality, but more of a drama or something people take seriously, then your audience will take you more seriously. I say this because a comedy short is what is abundant at Newgrounds, although you do stand out. What I'd like to see is a more sophisticated comedy style, less cliched jokes, and more story development, maybe think first who the characters are and how they develop.

What I see here is the seed of a professional, doing professional level work. Lots of things could be changed about this, but overall it's very very good, mainly because of the quality: great sound and graphics, but the story is too close to dexter or another film noir. So the lesson here is to start with something original, make original jokes, don't be afraid to get out onto that branch. Don't emulate the competition, just be the competition. Overall the film felt immature, because of the groaner jokes, it could have deviated from the archetype of noir films a little more. Again, awesome work! Love it!

[StrikeForce Kitty]

Needed polish. The characters should move faster from the start, the music loop craks loudly when it repeats, make sure to fade it out at the end if it can't loop properly. The art isn't bad, but could have been a lot more creative. I'd say with this game, keep making these refinements, and it should be playable. For me the characters are too slow moving, and the game was too boring.

[The Journey of Benson|]

I wasn't sure, but I tried twice to explain to the old man "Say I have to go now", maybe this is a programming error with how the system will ignore the character case. I wasn't allowed to progress past that point in the game... still not sure. Nothing happens on screen when I enter the phrase "Say I have to go now".

[The Chalice of Marfa]

I liked the gameplay mechanics, but I thought it was too gory and violent.

BoobMarley responds:

This comment is the absolute best endorsement / advertisement this game could ever have.